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The heart is one of the most complex and amazing organs in our organism. Actually, several diseases alter its function which could cause human dead. Est-ce-que ça semble naturel?
The heart is one of the most complex and amazing organs in our organism. Actually, several diseases alter its function which could cause human dead. Est-ce-que ça semble naturel?
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29 oct. 2014
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You got the point across very well. Great job! But it would make more sense to say "in our body" than "in our organism." Use the term "death" instead of "dead" as "dead" is a describing word, an adjective, where "death" is a verb, or an action/something that happens. And use another transition, as in linking one sentence to the other. "Actually" doesn't work here. "However" "Yet there are several..." Make more sense as it brings up another point in the topic.
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The heart is one of the most complex and amazing organs in the human organism. However, several diseases alter its function which can cause human death.
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"The heart is one of the most amazing organs in the human body. Several diseases can alter its function, causing death.
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You got the point across very well. Great job! But it would make more sense to say "in our body" than "in our organism." Use the term "death" instead of "dead" as "dead" is a describing word, an adjective, where "death" is a verb, or an action/something that happens. And use another transition, as in linking one sentence to the other. "Actually" doesn't work here. "However" "Yet there are several..." Make more sense as it brings up another point in the topic.
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